A to Z challenge: The letter A: ANTAGONIST

Writing prompt for A to Z Challenge : Antagonist
The Antagonist, for A to Z Challenge

Writing Prompt: ANTAGONIST.

Provided by: Marian Allen, who is a fellow A to Z challenge participant. Go visit her! (after you’ve finished reading my post, of course ..:)…)

Genre: Fiction/Flash


I‘m my own antagonist. Ask anyone, especially my doctor in her white suit, and they’ll tell you I need to be watched, and you need to watch yourself around me. Which is why they put me in this opium-scented white room, in white clothes, so I would not see colors.  Colors upset me, you see, and they’re scared of me when I’m upset. White reminds me of my clan.

I’m calm enough usually, especially when the doctor is here. It is a she, I know that, because her voice trills out of her round face-mask , playing on me, calming my nerves down, one by one. That is her job.

But through my half-closed eyes I see red. A silken wire of red has escaped her white hairnet, and now I have to see all of it. I’m going to grip her hand when she is not looking, and rip that mask away. But her hum is making me drowsy, my hands heavy.

And she is gone. They must have realized something was upsetting me, they monitor my heart from the outside. But now I know her hair is red.

I’ll wait till she comes in next time.


I still need prompts for the rest of the alphabet, so keep them coming! I’m tweeting A to Z posts at #atozchallenge: mine, and the others’ I like!

Thanks and shout-outs to organisers Arlee Bird (Tossing It Out) , Jeffrey Beesler’s (World of the Scribe),  Alex J. Cavanaugh (Alex J. Cavanaugh) , Jen Daiker ( Unedited), Candace Ganger (The Misadventures in Candyland) , Karen J Gowen  (Coming Down the Mountain) , Talli Roland ,  Stephen Tremp (Breakthrough Blogs )

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  1. Marie

    This is great! I love the idea of using a writing prompt for the challenge. Looking forward to reading more! 🙂

    Thanks! I’ve found other A-Zers doing fiction as well. This whole challenge is a great idea!

  2. Jeanne Kraus

    Great writing. I thoroughly enjoyed and can’t wait for B! I like your website and your links to other good spots for writers. I have put myself on your follow list.

    • Damyanti

      To follow from blogger, just go to the Reading List below Dashboard, and click on Add at the bottom. In the window that pops up, paste the link to my blog. Click Done. Thanks for wanting to follow me 🙂

  3. lemon123

    Yup, the lady with the strand of red hair will return. You’re really creative. Man, you guys are good. I am loving this challenge so much. Yes, she is your antagonist.:)

  4. Stephen Tremp

    Great start to the Challenge! I did a series on Villaions to close out 2010 and had some guest bloggers help. It sure is fun to develop those antagonsits!

  5. Larri

    Holy Frijoles! This antagonist is frightening. LOVED it and so can’t wait to read your other posts. Exellent job!

    Visiting from the A to Z Challenge. Happy Friday! 🙂

    • Damyanti

      Summer, the idea is to make this somewhat personal. I can easily pick prompts myself, but getting them from my readers is fun and challenging.

    • Damyanti

      Thanks 🙂 B and C are scheduled, am working on D…need help with prompts for E.WIll I make it Z? Happy A2Z to you too!

  6. Dafeenah

    I absolutely love your writing style. I could feel the sterility of the room as I read your post and the strand of red shining against the white. Beautiful!

    Happy A-Z!! Dafeenah

  7. Damyanti

    Thanks for your kind words, Sheri, and I hope you stop by again for the other letters of the alphabet. And maybe suggest a writing-prompt for some of the letters 😉

  8. Damyanti

    Mara, yes it is. I’m not sure I’m up to it, but I won’t find out unless I try. Thanks for your comment, and I hope you get to write fiction for A-Z

  9. Mara Nash

    I like that you wrote a piece of fiction. I’m going to try to incorporate some into the month, as well. It certainly is a challenge to post this many days in a row!

    • Damyanti

      Thanks Alex. This character will work his way into one of my stories somewhere, I’m sure. I’m glad you find him disturbing. He is meant to be.

  10. Laura Eno

    The ultimate challenge (guaranteed to put you in the Antagonist’s place) would be to continue paragraphs of this story with the letter of the day. 🙂
    Wonderful, creepy little story you have here!
    D could be demented…

    • Damyanti

      If I live through the challenge this year, I’ll do it for the next one 🙂

      And that is the second suggestion for ‘demented’ wonder whether it is my piece that is inspiring the prompt lol…thankyou, both for your support on twitter, and your comment here.

  11. lisa

    fiction pieces are my favorite.. I am going to be working in a few… in this challenge you can bet…

    • Damyanti

      Thankyou, thankyou..space it is :)! I’m tweeting this yes, hoping to find more and more links where the posts are up. It gets so disappointing to click on the link on the list and find no relevant post…with tweeted links, I’m sure.

  12. Rosalind Adam

    That is one creepy character you’ve created there. Fascinating to think that that character might never have come into existence had this blog challenge not arrived. Looking forward to reading your B.

    • Damyanti

      Yep, he’s creepy. Wonder which part of my head he lived in :). B is scheduled, and will post in a few hours. It isn’t very creepy, but I”m hoping you’ll like it

  13. India Drummond

    Ooh, I love this. I’m going a bit demented trying to figure out how I’m going to visit everyone, but I decided to break the list up and visit different people every day. Seems the most sensible way.

    Speaking of which, how about ‘demented’ for D!?

    • Damyanti

      I’m planning to visit back those who visit me, and then to catch posts from twitter and my Google reader. Not much of a plan, but I’ve visited about 30 blogs today…which isn’t bad considering I did other things as well, including working my way up to C. Bless you for the prompt, might end up using it 🙂

    • Damyanti

      Misha, you shall have more. Only not of this story, for the time being. Tomorrow’s story on the B-word is already scheduled 🙂

  14. Linn B Halton

    Hints of horror – creepy – I like it, but want to know what happens next … oops, it’s flash fiction! Still, you could write the continuing story – after you reach Z of course…..

  15. R.M. Hepler

    wow.*big grin* okay, I was very sad when it ended, cause it was really interesting and I think it might have eaten a piece of my soul….. >.>

    Great job, reminded me of the movie ‘Quills’ .

    • Damyanti

      It will show in your book Rachael, and your readers would love him too! Thanks for stopping by, and how about giving me a hand with the prompts ?;)

  16. Damyanti

    Thanks Louanne and Yvonne!

    Yvonne, I can’t reach you through the link on your name. Could you please leave a working link so I can visit you ? 🙂

  17. Sarah Allen

    Way to start things up! Antagonist…yeah, those are actually something I have trouble with. I mean, I can’t see them as antagonists. The best example is Ben Linus from LOST…I just felt so sorry for him, rather than disgusted, as I probably should have been. *sigh* oh well. Good post!

    Sarah Allen
    (my creative writing blog)

    • Damyanti

      Thanks, Susannah. I dunno if I can go on with fiction throughout…depends on the prompts I get, and what I am able to do with them. will head over to your blog now 🙂

  18. Arlee Bird

    Nice one. Pretty creepy. A good start in the first fiction piece I’ve read in the challenge. Keep it going and you’ll be a hit in the A to Z.

    Tossing It Out
    Twitter hashtag: #atozchallenge

  19. Rhonda@Laugh Quotes

    Ok, so I missed the genre: fiction, and was thinking, wow, so much honesty – and how did they let you get access to a computer. Good luck from a fellow challenge participant.

    • Damyanti

      LOL…To get access to a laptop, I massacred the hospital, of course :)….anyone would do that for A to Z challenge!

      Just kidding…and thanks for the visit and comment 🙂

  20. Damyanti

    No worries, Corinne 🙂 . I do not own copyrights on word-prompts! Thanks for dropping by, and I will sure visit your blog once your post is up 🙂

  21. Corinne O'Flynn

    Hooray for blogfests! I love that you used your prompt to write a fiction piece, I might have to steal borrow that for a couple of my days. 🙂 Hope you’ll hop over to my blog when my post goes live at 1201 MST.