Rachael Harrie is rounding up her Writecampaign with the the third challenge, and of course, like the first and the second, my third entry is again flash fiction. Here’s what she has asked us to do:
Write a blog post in 300 words or less, excluding the title. The post can be in any format, whether flash fiction, non-fiction, humorous blog musings, poem, etc. The blog post should show:
- that it’s morning,
- that a man or a woman (or both) is at the beach
- that the MC (main character) is bored
- that something stinks behind where he/she is sitting
- that something surprising happens.
Just for fun, see if you can involve all five senses AND include these random words: “synbatec,” “wastopaneer,” and “tacise.” (NB. these words are completely made up and are not intended to have any meaning other than the one you give them).
And without further ado, here’s my entry : (No 127 on the list!)
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On the dawn of his fortieth birthday, Brad surveyed the beach, to make sure he was alone. The breeze further ruffled his long hair, tangling it with his scratchy beard. This body with its many appendages and extensions bothered him.
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If you liked the 200-word piece and would like to read more of my stories, check out A to Z Stories of Life and Death, available on Kindle , Nook and Smashwords.
Really creative and I admire anyone who can do satire well.
Oh gosh, I love this! You really evoke some wonderful sensory details here, and I was giggling like crazy over that picture of wild, unkempt Brad. Wonderful work. 😀
That's so different. I wondered what made you decide to make Brad the main character of your story! I like that line that he is longing the rancid smell of the Tacise wormhole. Good one.
Amusing and original! Thanks for sharing it.
Awesome! Love the world you've built here. Yes, this Being is on Earth, but he's clearly of another world. Really enjoy seeing things from his perspective.
I could totally read more of this story.
This is an original piece, and I love the way you've described the world. Very evocative!
Mine is #25.
What has everyone got against Brad, he'd like to know?
Wow, that was really great! I'm off to vote now 🙂
"…you may take off your clothes now…" Hah! Very nice, very nice. 🙂
Hey! Guess what?! You're moving on to the next round in the judging process. 🙂 Congrats!
🙂 Margo
I agree with David. Great world building!
Got to love the world-building here. The environment has its own breath. Great job!
Looking forward to your Part 4. 🙂
Brad, Brad, when will you learn? Written very well! Nice use of those dreaded words! ; )
Hi,
Cool premise. Poor Brad, can't get women to leave him alone. I feel his pain.
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No. 79
"a name his tongue could barely taste"–what a beautiful, beautiful turn of phrase. Fantastic.
Funny little ending too, hm hmm:)
–> Hey look, two Jess's in a row…
Wow, I loved this!! I really liked how you used the challenge words! Reading them felt so natural! Great job! You have my vote 🙂
I'm entry #5