U for Unable to forgive her: #atozchallenge Fiction

Today’s story starter (at the beginning of the story in bold) comes from the super-helpful blogger friend Jocelyn Rish and the photo from Joseph. W. Richardson, an amazing writer and photographer I came across during this challenge.

Unable to forgive her, he walked out to the lakeside, to watch a pale sun set amidst the bare branches of autumn.

They had bought this place beside the lake dreaming of weekends there, planning an extension when the children came, a boat to take them on rides and a short jetty where they would moor it after a long day out on the water.

He breathed in the chilled air, and the heaviness that is the curse of cold evenings settled upon his heart, slowing his limbs as he walked, filling him with a longing for a warm fire, mulled wine between his palms, her sigh upon his neck, reassuring, content.

He walked back to the log cabin, but instead of driving off after a final goodbye as he had intended, he found himself shoving open the door, and walking in. He switched on the lights and looked around—throughout her long illness, she had added touches here and there, in the bric-a-brac and paintings she had picked during their travels, their framed pictures in which their faces glowed with the conviction of happily ever after. Only she left before her time. Twenty-nine made no sense– she should have waited to turn thirty. She should never have left. 

His eyes cloaked in mist, he dragged the bean bag near the fire place, turned it on, and settled back. As the warmth seeped into his blood, he inhaled her fragrance that lingered in the air. He closed his eyes and saw her as she was, smiling, full of life even when angry or sad. Maybe she had lived squeezed in more years in the ones she lived, after all.

He pushed himself up on his feet, walked across to the kitchen to make himself a drink, something warm to hold between his palms. He was going to stay the night.

A to Z Stories of Life and Death

If you liked this story you might like some of the stories I wrote for my A to Z last year

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  1. DJ

    Privliged to read your beautifully knit creations through the challenge 🙂
    It amazes me how you can put so much of things, descriptions, moods, settings so crisply!

  2. Jocelyn Rish

    Another winner. It's sad, but also hopeful. You can tell he's going to be okay.

    I also wanted to thank you for your supportive comments on my post yesterday – it really helped lift my spirits.

  3. Damyanti

    Thanks for all the lovely comments—I don't do love very well, but seems like this one came through.

    The contrast between cold and warm was deliberate, as was the positive note on which this one ended. I've been told I'm scaring and turning off people with my dark imagination in my A-Z series.

  4. MAJK

    awww, you can feel his love for her, his sadness at her absence but threaded through the grief and the pain you wove in his deep love for her.


    *~ MAJK ~*
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  5. Theresa Milstein

    Such a great mood here. I'm with Nutschell on the description. My favorite line:

    "…filling him with a longing for a warm fire, mulled wine between his palms, her sigh upon his neck, reassuring, content."

  6. Angela Brown

    I LOVED this one. So full of the many emotions felt from a love lost all too soon yet the ending was…appropos, sad with a hint of something positive.

  7. Sarah

    Initially I thought the "she" in question had cheated on him and that is why he was unable to forgive her. Nice to see that you struck out on a different path. There was so much more of a mixture of emotions: nostalgia, anger, sadness.