For this event, you needed to:
- SUBMIT your name to the Inlinkz list NOW if you wish to participate
- CREATE your entry according to the theme – August – Spectacular Settings. More info here
- EDIT until your entry sparkles
- PUBLISH on your blog August 19 – 26 – state feedback preferences (full critique to general)
- DELETE your former link & add the new direct link with the URL of your entry.
- READ & COMMENT
Basically, we needed to add a setting excerpt that inspired us (Part A), and post something of our own (Part B).
Part A : My excerpt is from a remarkable book, Perfume, by Patrick Süskind: I love this because it shows us Paris through the sense of smell alone, and sets the stage not just for the murder and putrescence to follow in the novel, but also the ‘perfume’ theme.
“In the period of which we speak, there reigned in the cities a stench barely conceivable to us modern men and women. The streets stank of manure, the courtyards of urine, the stairwells stank of moldering wood and rat droppings, the kitchen of spoiled cabbage and mutton fat; the unaired parlors stank of stale dust, the bedrooms of greasy sheets, damp featherbeds, and the pungently sweet aroma of chamberpots. The stench of sulfur rose from the chimneys, the stench of caustic lyes from the tanneries, and from the slaughterhouses came the stench of congealed blood. People stank of sweat and unwashed clothes; from their mouths came the stench of rotting teeth, from their bellies that of onions, and from their bodies, if they were no longer young, came the stench of rancid cheese and sour milk and tumorous disease. The rivers stank, the marketplaces stank, the churches stank, it stank beneath the bridges and in the palaces…And of course the stench was foulest in Paris, for Paris was the largest city of France.”
Part B: Mine is a scene from Chapter 7 of my novel WIP, tentatively titled Underneath the Skin: (This is an unpolished draft, and I’m hoping to use your suggestions to tweak it further. The text contains italicized Hindi words and ‘Indian English’ dialogues, and I’m hoping they add to the atmosphere without taking away from the reader’s understanding: I need to know if this is not so. This is the first time I’m putting it out there. Would love to do beta exchanges for anyone else with a WIP. I have posted it as a picture to prevent content scraping: please click on it twice (not double-click) to get a large font size.)
WORD COUNT : 868
FCA : This is an absolutely unpolished draft, so I’m more than happy to do a crit in exchange for anyone who posts a detailed crit. I usually never put out anything this raw, but this time, I’m going to try it as an experiment. I have every faith in Denise and Yolanda, and this community they’ve created, to help hone my writing in the piece. I trust this blog’s readers, as well– I’ve never regretted being vulnerable in this space.
While this post is for a writers’ event, I also invite readers (who’re not writers or publishing professionals) to share their thoughts.
Would love to know your impression on both excerpts.
Have you read the book Perfume? Would you read it, based on the excerpt? Why, why not?
Based on the excerpt from my WIP, would you like to know more about the character and how she fits into this setting? What did you like about the descriptions? What can be done better? How can the setting show off the character better?
As a reader, how important is setting to you when you read a piece of fiction?