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Today’s picture prompt and story starter (at the beginning of the story in bold) come from the awesome Donna B McNicol
and I chose them because the picture spoke to me, telling me what it wanted me to write. I simply obeyed, and here’s what came out.
When she wasn’t bedridden, she found time to comb their hair, brush their dresses, paint their nails and pouts, but not for cooking him a pot of stew, or mending his shirts, or helping him at the shop.
Beauty on the outside repelled him, be it his mother, the sluts he hunted, or these dolls. His wife’s deformity had saved her.
Now that she no longer stood between him and the blasted dolls, his hands got down to what they had itched to do over the years– tear them, strip them and dump them, the pieces of junk that they were. Much like what he had done to the sluts of this town. His sweet little town had been so much the cleaner for his life’s work, and didn’t even know it.
He stepped back in to the house, away from the dolls, then looked back to admire the sight once more. If anything, this is what he liked about this doll’s graveyard—the fact that he could lay it out in his back garden, in plain sight. Not like the one by the river for the sluts who didn’t deserve a decent burial, but got one all the same. Well, work was work. If it needed to be done on the quiet with no one the wiser, so be it.
Full of pious intentions, he clicked the back door shut. It was evening, time for the sluts to be about. The town needed him to go hunting tonight.
If you liked this story you might like some of the stories I wrote for my A to Z last year.
Thanks everyone, once again for the lovely comments. This one was meant to be a snapshot of a serial-killer's mind—cliched, I know, but challenging for me to do in a short space.
I'm not in love with the end result, but it was good practice.
Donna, the story mostly owes to your pic, and then of course, your story starter.
Jericha, yes, it is forgivable as micro-fiction 🙂
Lilia–the whole idea of flash is to say a lot in a few lines—but I;ve done a much better job in the serial killer in my A-Z book–Y for Youth. But I love the practice AZ gives me–it is time-bound, and I have no control over the prompts.
The way the story got gradually darker, even though it was so short, was great. It's amazing how much dislike you can build up for a character in only a few paragraphs!
Happy A-Z blogging!
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D. – I really love your imaginative darkness 🙂
Thanks for choosing my photo/prompt and congrats on a story that gave me chills. You REALLY need to take this one and run with it…I can see a great novella without any problem, even a book. Go for it!!
Gosh, this is a chilling little tale. Well done though. As for the dolls – they give me chills just looking at them!
Awesome story. Love it.
Laura B Writer
Very dark. A doll graveyard as his visual–creepy!
Shannon at The Warrior Muse, co-host of the 2012 #atozchallenge! Twitter: @AprilA2Z
Good to find a blog from the AtoZ list which is fiction. Consider this piece (and the last) as aspiration attained.
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Oh, scary. This is the type of book that I can't put down because I have to finish it before going to sleep! Thank you for coming by my blog.
Rhia from Five Minute Piece for Inspiration (around #862 on A to Z list)
Oooooh! I like this post. The picture alone was weird in a good way, and your story was worth stopping by for. http://1000wrongs.blogspot.com
Creepy- thanks for that! 😉
Leigh #893 of the A to Z challenge
Dark character with a darker heart…nice work 🙂 Your picture prompts are fun, might try one today.
A glimpse into a criminal mind. Nicely done! Loved the post.
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Oh my, deliciously creepy. Makes me feel like checking to see if my door's locked!
Wow. This is intense intense intense.
The image… yowza… I am still quivering over here!
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Julie Jordan Scott
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Powerfully dark character. Gave me chills!
Yipes, FASCINATING. Love that this is a fragment, actually – I fell like there's so much more story in here for its shortness. I'm guessing I might roll my eyes if this was a full-length novel, but as a piece of microfiction it's got everything I want: drama, hints, just enough characterization, a story that opens out around the edges.
Wow, was not expecting that! Very intriguing – I want to know MORE!
Texas Playwright Chick
He's one disturbing character. Great story!
Creepy story! The crime-y aspects are right up my alley!
A to Z Blogger
scary—no good do gooder
Err and WHOA! He is one scary dude! Creepy!
Creepy and great: can't beat that combination!
Your characters are always so intriguing. Thanks for the great story.
The Growing Writer
Dropping in from the A to Z Challenge. Loved this post! Great story 🙂
A wonderfully creepy story! 🙂
Wow, very sinister and creepy.
Ooooh, serial killer flash. Very nice.
Chilling! And to think he had a wife and a mother. *shivers* Great FF piece. 🙂
Talk about a dark character. The worst ones are those who believe they're on some kind of crusade.