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Today’s story comes from the prompt and picture sent by
Jamie Gibbs. I chose this because of its fairy-tale quality, and I fancied the idea of a very literary, cynical take on what would have made excellent fantasy.
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If you liked this story you might like some of the stories I wrote for my A to Z last year.
One of my favorites so far.
What a wierd fairytale! I wasn't sure what this was all about until I got to the line: Wouldn't you rather go back?
Then the whole back story became clear: Peter Pansington was formerly a garden statue that was magically given the gift of life and mortality.
Very clever!
Oh now I get it. He was Peter Pan, the boy who would never grow up!
Very clever indeed!
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna's A-Z, the letter K
First of all, that is such a great picture. And what a different direction you took with it – a little melancholy, but nice to see Peter finally take some responsibility.
Wishing you continued success with the A to Z challenge,
Jocelyn
Great piece. Left me wanting more though.
Peter and his wife should have a conversation and recommit.
Great makes me recognize some feelings I had to work through.
Holy cow! Love the concept. Would love to see that fleshed out into a short story. I really do like micro-fiction, but it always leaves me wanting MORE. I know that's not the point (or challenge) but damn girl, trees that walk to be mortal, that really rocks.
Tina @ Life is Good
Co-Host of the April A to Z Challenge
Twitter: @AprilA2Z #atozchallenge
Perhaps Peter would enjoy learning to cook for himself. How sad that he finds no point to it all;-) You could have such fun expanding this story:-)
A "must follow" blog. And I'll do that. 🙂
Wonderful tale… please, may I have some more?
Intriguing story.
Lisa
http://livethemoment09.blogspot.com
What a great story and I love the picture!
This is me, Duncan D. Horne, visiting you from the A-Z challenge, wishing you all the best throughout April and beyond.
Duncan In Kuantan
I hate it when I wake up in random places. 🙂 Very nice short story!
Very nice, and I love how it grew out of the photo of the tree. It all ties in nicely.
The point is that there is no point. There is beauty in the wonder of being anything at all. Loved it.
Von L
The Growing Writer
My hats off to you, writing a story for your blog and "I" posting. Loved the picture.
I'll be visiting all of you back in return for your lovely comments.
Here's a few replies to comments that I feel need an answer in clarification:
Maggie: No, there is no smile at the end– this is how I wanted the story all along, cos I wrote the last line long before I reached the ending 🙂
Melody—I'm not even sure Peter married Wendy. Peter here is the peter in all young boys..
Angela, in each of us is a Peter and a tree…at least according to the story :)—so yes, pity us all.
Teresa, it is a bit about existentialism, yes. I read Sartre and Camus more than a decade ago, but they never quite left me.
Kathy–I'm amazed at what readers find in a story. Your reaction made me think twice about what I did with the story.:) I thought I had killed the fantasy in this one with a monster dose of the mundane, butchered it quite without mercy. But I guess once the story is out there, readers decide what it means, and what it says to them—and I'm happy with that. Thanks for reading the story yourself, and to your kids.
This was a brilliant story. I loved the fantasy angle to the real life. I just loved it. Wow. I even read it to my kids it was so good and they loved it too!!
Kathy
http://gigglingtruckerswife.blogspot.com
Wow, I am intrigued. A brilliant story. Thank you for visiting my blog.
The story is well done, and enjoyed. The image of the tree is perfect with its one eye open, one eye closed face. I love it.
there has to be a point
🙂 Interesting tale. Great imagery. I have not quite mastered stepping into a philosophy discipline foreign to my own. But you seem to do it quite well… Hmm… maybe that is you coming through, though…and not a stretch of philosophy?
Nice post 🙂
Teresa Cypher
http://dreamersloversandstarvoyagers.blogspot.com/
I don't know if I'm happy or sad at the end of that, but I am definitely intrigued.
A-Zer! http://libbyheily.blogspot.com/
Very creative. Great writing!
What a picture! Great story, although the lack of point of it all is a rather sobering thought.
J.C. Martin
A to Z Blogger
I'm not sure which to pity more, Peter for accepting the "bedlam" that is his life, which will come to an end…or the tree trapped in its state of always trying to find the point to things.
Perhaps a bit of pity to both should be duly doled out.
Your story was an interesting one.
Well written one, with serious tips to follow while blogging and following, ye, the word verification irritates many, Remove at ones to get more visits and comments.
Thanks for sharing these tips and today;s post
Best
Phil
I think that Jamie Oliver is his long lost twin and they should find each other. 🙂
Great moral of the story
Very creative story
Very clever. I always thought not growing up would get boring eventually, especially as a statue, but it would be nice if his life had turned out just a little better!
Great piece! I like how he didn't chose an immortal life.
Cherie Reich – Author
Surrounded by Books Reviews
Peter should get his wife some cooking lessons 🙂
Peter needs a new job, a work out routine, and a chef!
umm I can decided where I'm depressed or impressed or both… probably both. Poor Peter Pan … someone really should have taught that Wendy creature to cook 😉
*~ MAJK ~*
Twitter @Safireblade
A To Z Blog Challenge
Nicely done. I suspect if the story had continued we would have found a turn around – some level of recognition between the two that would have left us with a smile. I can see it coming…
Another great story. But I'm feeling a little bereft now.