This week, I’ve dedicated the blog to I’m Hearing Voices , which has turned out to be an awesome blogfest hosted by Cassie Mae at Reading, Writing, and Lovin’ it! and Angie at Live to Write…Edit when Necessary.
What I don’t know can’t hurt me– I’ve gone that route before. Do I want to try it again?
Yes, his eyes are the shade of burnt caramel, that darken when I’m around. He is gorgeous, shy, ten years younger, everything I want.
When he rubs lotion on my legs, the frissons on my skin make me want to take things further.
|Character storyboard Anjali Menon|
This Delhi winter makes your skin dry, he says. Take care of your skin, it is what makes you beautiful. Beauty is not skin deep, I say, kissing his full lower lip. You never know, he says, and his lop-sided grin makes me want to drag him to the bedroom.
I don’t. We’ve only just met, and if he is pacing it, so should I. Boys love the chase, only I wish he’d hurry up. And marrying a chef is exactly the sort of thing I would advice me, if I were my own therapist. I need nurturing. This is what they warn us against in my profession– psychiatrists analyse everyone, themselves, most of all. So stop it already, Ms Anjali Menon.
But why do I sometimes feel his smile switches on a milli-second too late, that his kiss seems like he taught it to himself, that his face is sometimes a mask that moves? And when I catch him staring at me, I step back as if blown back by an autumn gust of wind?
Sometimes the quietness of his gaze frightens me. There, I said it.
I read and write for a living, and I am also a jewelry designer. You just knocked my socks off. You are a gem!
Which gets me thinking:
If you really WERE a gem, I am seeing you as the highest quality opal…mysterious, sensuous, and flashing glints of incredible colors unexpectedly.
Thanks for this blog entry. I loved it.
See you in the A-Z challenge this year, once again! jean
The mistress of description strikes again! Love this post. Looking forward to reading your writing origins post soon:) I've always been curious!
You've captured a nice amount of tension and emotion. Well done.
I wanted you to know you are in my top 10 for this challenge 🙂
Oh gosh I like the conflicting emotions!
Excellent internalization. A nice glimpse into what is important to this character.
Oh just jump his bones! Haha!
This was great. Totally sexy and frightening all at the same time 🙂
Wow, is all I can say. I'm going to read your other posts now. Sorry I'm late!
Gorgeous writing! Really, just beautiful. I can FEEL how she feels about him 🙂 Loved it!
Man, she's so conflicted! But I don't trust this 10 year younger guy! Apparently neither does Anjali!
I felt every word of that, like Anjali was talking directly to me, and I could really hear how much her doubts about him are coming to the surface.
As Rick says, Attraction, lust, indecision. All three emotions come through this piece very strongly.
Attraction, lust, indecision. There's so much emotion packed in there that I can't pick just one. Awesome bit of flash fiction.
Oh this was haunting. Underneath the lust and desire I could feel Anjali has for Vrishchik, I also felt a similar uneasy tension to what you showed in Wednesday's piece.
You have a real talent for setting a tone.
Thanks for sharing.
Love this and want to read more!
Ah, attraction, and dare I say lust? Nice.
Great job – I kind of want her to go for it, but I don't because it could mean trouble.
Very interesting. Very well written. Love this!
Great emotions in this scene. Very vivid and interesting.
You've managed to pack a lot of emotion – and some back story – into very few words! I like the hints of passion, the trepidation, and the internal struggle of Ms Menon.
I wouldn't hold back! Oh wait, yeah I would…