
This edition of WEP Writing Challenge is a prompt fiction based on “Life is Beautiful”
As usual, I’ve used characters from my writing universe: from upcoming literary thriller, THE BLUE MONSOON. These snippets of prompt-fiction show aspects of the story only hinted at in the novel. When you read the book, you’ll recognize the characters, and the voices will (hopefully) blend into the tapestry of the book.
——–So here’s my WEP entry, a prompt fiction flash piece I’ll feature only here on this site.—-
Damyanti Biswas © 2023
TAGLINE: In a halo of the senses
WORD COUNT: 325 words, FCA
You’re married to your solitude, you think, and then she walks in. You tell yourself she’s passing by, just like the rest of them, but she pauses. Walks to you, sits down. It’s just a class you’re taking together. Computer classes. The class is in an upstairs room. Humid Mumbai air weighs the afternoon down. Outside, mating pigeons coo on the eaves. Sweat trickles down your temples but you pay it no mind.
In the one hour your teacher drones on, you know she’s better than you. Than the teacher too. By miles. You wonder why she’s there at all. While leaving, she smiles and you know you’re done for. You wonder no more.
Months later, you’re carrying her groceries. Listening to her mother. Being the man of the house, only you’re not the man of the house. You tell yourself you’ll get out of it. Take her with you. You watch the smiles that bloom on her face each time you enter a room. Life is beautiful when she smiles, your body suspended in a halo of the senses, like a psychedelic acid hit.
Days pass and soon you’re like a cat up a tree. It seemed like a good idea to climb up, but now you don’t know your way down. You stay quiet, watching. Waiting for her to help you down.
You do her bidding. Her family’s. And soon you know no other life. You’re doing much worse than bringing in the groceries. You don’t know how to stop when she smiles at you.
At night, you whisper to yourself —it is only your hands doing those things you cannot name, not your heart. It is as if your house is on fire, your room, your bed, but even as your sheets burn and you know the flames will kiss you the way she never has, you watch her flick her flyaway hair, and that thought crosses your mind again: life is beautiful.
Do you read or write prompt-based fiction? Have you ever participated in the WEP? What do you think of this character? Would you like to read his story?
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I really enjoyed Blue Bar. So I imagine the next book will be equally great. Looks like it, based on this story.
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Thanks so much for the read and review. Will be picking up Proof of Existence!
I thoroughly enjoyed this tiny extract from your up and coming book and am very curious about this character. Very skilfully written.
Thanks for reading and reviewing The Blue Bar, Kalpana, and I’m thrilled this one made you curious!
What a different take on the prompt! I’m drawn into the character and wonder what will happen next. Will he be able to act upon his emotions, his thoughts, his deep longing for a relationship with this woman who has entranced him? I’m ready to turn the page!
Thanks, Beth! I’m glad the character and voice are intriguing enough for you to want to turn the page.
I enjoyed this. I’m wondering about the paragraph at the end. The rest was so clear and vivid. The end felt like a metaphor, or a murder suicide by fire but I sort of doubt that. A lot of rich imagery. Glad I got to read it.
The end is both though I can’t reveal more :). Thanks so much for reading, Jamie, and hope to see you stop by often.
Great writing, D, and also one of my fav movies!
Thanks so much, Pam!
Is this character from your new book? Such a sad life he lives! 🙁
Yes, a very tiny character in The blue Monsoon! Thanks for your read and review of The Blue Bar, and I hope the sequel satisfies 🙂
Intriguing excerpt. Is the MC a man, or a woman? “Being the man of the house, only you’re not the man of the house.” Great hook! It’s always a pleasure to read your writing. Thanks.
Thanks Nilanjana–you always say the kindest things! This person is not the MC at all, only a tiny supporting role.
Thanks for sharing!!.. looking forward to the new book…wishing you much success and a dream come true!.. 🙂
Hope all is well in your part of the universe and until we meet again…
May the dreams you hold dearest
Be those which come true
May the kindness you spread
Keep returning to you
(Irish Saying)
Thanks so much, Larry. I hope you enjoyed The Blue Bar.
Hi Damyanti – it feels almost like a Hitchcock film … it certainly could be filmed like that … ‘life is beautiful’ – hers not so much. Creative writing for sure … I wouldn’t watch the film that’s for sure. Congratulations – so so sad – well done – an interesting WEP – Hilary
Thanks for always reading, Hilary. This was a super-quick writing exercise, so I’m glad it worked for you.
Damyanti, a wonderful introduction to characters from your upcoming book. A moving snippet. A tale of lethal love is an apt description. Incredibly sad.
Thanks, Denise. The cast of the characters is the same as The Blue Bar, but this one is a new supporting role in The Blue Monsoon.
My heart aches for him, and for all others snared and controlled by obsession. This is an incredibly powerful snippet.
Thanks, Sue. I quick-wrote this because I wanted to restart the blog after my time slaving on copyedits. Glad it worked for you!
Lethal love! Stunning piece of writing, Damyanti. Makes me curious about your characters.
Thanks Sonia. This character has a small role in THE BLUE MONSOON, so it was satisfying to give him a voice. I set a timer for a 10 minutes and then tweaked it. Glad it resonated!
This is an intriguing, dark, and beautiful piece of writing. What we will convince ourselves of… 🙂
Thanks, Terveen. Yes, sometimes we convince ourselves of the damnedest things.
Ahh. What a beautifully satisfying piece of writing, Damyanti.
Thanks, Lee. As you can probably tell, I knocked it out last minute and got it in the list under the wire!
Wow – I didn’t expect that turn! Lost to the power of a smile. Nicely done!
Thanks, Jemi. You’re always such a wonderfully supportive reader.
A tragic life is unfolding in this short snippet. I hope the hero could get out of it, but I’m afraid he can’t. Very powerful.
Thanks, Olga. I wanted to write about obsession–in some ways The Blue Monsoon is a novel of obsessions.