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Today’s picture prompt and story starter (at the beginning of the story in bold) come from Marian Allen who has been an awesome blog friend and supporter since the last A to Z Challenge when I met her.
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If you liked this story you might like some of the stories I wrote for my A to Z last year.
Great writing, Damyanti, and the story has your hallmark poignancy all over it. Thank you for sharing!
wonderful story and writing!
very good!
and i remember your flashes from last year & you asking for prompts for the harder letters =)
Wow. How could such an awesome story be in so few words? I loved it! Thanks for posting.
Great story there – perfect with the photo.
And thanks for the tips – I am finding that sometimes the A to Z bloggers visiting my blog indeed make it hard to find their blogs.
Beautiful! Great descriptions.
Powerful story. You write so beautifully.
What a poignant story. Something that touches a lot of readers … I am sure.
You say a lot with just a few words.
Alex
from http://www.aheepofeverything.blogspost.com
Interesting take on this – I like the way she was hoping for her husband's death, and then shocked by it at the same time. Nice blend.
What a powerful story. You are an incredible wordsmith.
And while I would love to call you didi, something tells me I might well be older than you (even though you write with a maturity way beyond anything I can manage).
I like that line in the beginning "all that was left was a never-ending sunset" – it sets the tone for how despondent the character is and drew me in.
What a powerful story. I hope there is more, this should be part of a novel. I felt every raw emotion. You have an amazing way with words and description.
What a moving piece! I love your writing!
Thank you for visiting my blog, and your kind comments.
Whoa! You brought on Da freak!
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Thanks again to everyone, for your comments. I'll not reply individually, but use the time instead to visit all of you back. I'm just replying here to the comments that need clarification…
Erin, that sprite was a crutch she had created to survive through an abusive marriage, through the loss of her husband who didn't deserve her love. She finally threw it away.
Rachel, I couldn't read beyond the first pages of the Twilight series, but yes, I did want to shatter the fairytale illusion here—sometimes faith is our strength, at others it is a weakness, and she had finally grown strong.
MAJK/ Melody– I didn't intend for this to end in tears, I had a smile when I wrote the end.
Marian, you were the one who started off this piece, the first words are yours, as are the images in the story, which derive from your photograph—so you're co-author, not just a small part.
Sue, your reading was mine—but I'm happy with the other readings too, once the story is out there, its meaning is decided by its readers, not the writer.
Lastly, for everyone who left a kind word, you don't know how grateful I am. Really.
Intense story. I am glad she opened the window to let in the sunshine and fresh breath of life. The devil is in our minds and we can defeat him anytime we want. Just beautiful…
Very engaging! Bravo!!
I have to remember to post those A to Z reminders tomorrow! 🙂
DL @ Cruising Altitude 2.0
Co-Host of the Blogging from A to Z Challenge.
Great piece! I love that picture too. 🙂
It's quite intense. Great post!
Doris
Gives a little chill. Is this a cliff hanger?
Gives a little chill. Is this a cliff hanger?
Simply put–awesome.
~Lynn
http://www.acommonsea.com
Hi D, love the spartan touch to this piece because it gives the reader a chance to fill in the dramatic blanks and get into the story.
I love the last paragraph with the "snapped" and "shoved" – very decisive, and firm like someone facing reality and facing it honestly. Interesting how we all read the one story differently. I sense hope and growing confidence…
Sue: An A-Z of Climate Matters
Oh my! This is haunting and compelling! You write so well. It brought me to tears. I kid you not.
Wonderful, as always, and astounding in how much you can do in such a little space.
I've been looking forward to this month all year! I'm so proud to be a little part of this story. 🙂
Marian Allen
Fantasies, mysteries, comedies, recipes
Ok, clearly, you are made of magic. 🙂
Powerful, unsettling, claustrophobic. This one will resonate with me for a while…
Wonderfully done, Damyanti. Thanks for sharing this.
Best,
Joe
D/Devious Devices
What a terrific, powerful story. Well done, as always!
~Marie
Ramblings of a Daydreamer
A powerful story. I love the description!
WOW! That was amazing and kept my attention the entire time!
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Amazing piece. Such strong and intense writing. Well done.
Excellent as always – the emotion was powerful – not enough to make me cry this time but enough to make me feel.
*~ MAJK ~*
Safireblade.com
A to Z Challenge
Ooh, I loved this! You did a great job setting across the loneliness here!
Really good writing, Damyanti!
Loved this installment and the picture made the story so believable.
Such a bittersweet story.
She snapped up the blinds, shoved the windows open. You've perfectly shattered the fairy tale illusion with these words.
This may or may not be what you were going for, but I was reminded of that scene in the second Twilight movie after Edward leaves Bella and she sits at the window for ages, and the camera spins slowly around her, watching the seasons change, and all the while she's still sitting there…
This was such a wonderfully written story. You wrote it so well I felt her betrayal. I am visiting from the A to Z challenge. I have lost me on the list so I am simply starting at the top and working my way down. 😀
Kathy
http://gigglingtruckerswife.blogspot.com/
Such a provoking piece of writing. So many emotions – one can feel the turmoil she is going through.
So sad but beautifully written.
How sad! I'm glad that she's moving on with her life, but giving up her thoughts of the sprite is still sad.
Erin
You are a master wordsmith Damyanti!
Beautiful piece.
Hello! Stopping by for the A to Z Challenge.
Susanne
PUTTING WORDS DOWN ON PAPER
This begs to be developed into a longer story, a novel, perhaps.
Lovely but very sad.
Such a powerful piece. Loved this! I particularly love this line: All that was left was a never-ending sunset, and the tower in front of her home that shot up into the sky.
Very powerful… looking forward to reading more from you!
This was extremely moving. I loved the powerful ending. You have such a fantastic way with words.
You are so incredibly talented!
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OMG, so powerful. They say betrayal is the most difficult emotion to deal with. You've really brought that emotion into focus — and the complexities around it. Great writing!
VERY "fairy tale" like, Damyanti. The tower came down at the end.
Tale Spinning
I loved it. A very powerful, emotional piece. There is light at the end of her tunnel. 🙂
Wow, this was powerful! I could feel her sorrow and betrayal. Very well written!